Don't you know?
That I caress you,
As gentle, tender breeze.
Guarding you and feeling you,
I wish you felt it too!
Don’t you know?
That I cried for you
And brewed up a storm in rage
Innocent punished, naught accomplished
Absurd things I do!
Don’t you know?
That I knew you well
I coursed through you like veins,
What’s in you, your heart and soul?
None but me can tell.
Don’t you know?
That I miss you too
Now that I leave for the sea
Because, my love, I’m eroding you.
Goodbye is the best for you.
Don’t you know?
That I think of you
Thoughts! Deep as in the sea.
But I surface and evaporate,
Just to come back to you.
Don’t you know,
That I am always there !
As wind, as rain, as river and sea .
Oh mighty Mountain! You'll never know,
Who I am or what's in me!
That I caress you,
As gentle, tender breeze.
Guarding you and feeling you,
I wish you felt it too!
Don’t you know?
That I cried for you
And brewed up a storm in rage
Innocent punished, naught accomplished
Absurd things I do!
Don’t you know?
That I knew you well
I coursed through you like veins,
What’s in you, your heart and soul?
None but me can tell.
Don’t you know?
That I miss you too
Now that I leave for the sea
Because, my love, I’m eroding you.
Goodbye is the best for you.
Don’t you know?
That I think of you
Thoughts! Deep as in the sea.
But I surface and evaporate,
Just to come back to you.
Don’t you know,
That I am always there !
As wind, as rain, as river and sea .
Oh mighty Mountain! You'll never know,
Who I am or what's in me!
- with love, the Nature…
13 comments:
hey aki DON'T YOU KNOW i am your die heart fan for your poetic skill.... in this poem i liked third,fifth and sixth para a lot and that pics is so perfect and relavent....hmmm sun will shine for ever like that ur poem will be the best forever....keep rocking all the best for ur next poem....
Immer wieder toll !! Immer wieder schön ;-)
heyyyy.... as usual really cool.. nice thought... each of ur posts have been so difrnt..( okkandhu yosipiyo ;)).. anyway keep going... little a little fan club growing for u ;)
hey aki
"don't you know?
that u r a cool poetess with tonnes of talent!"
ha ha
:)
fabulous one akila!
a nice one u ve given us after a very long time!
Beautiful, Akila :) Cool work, darling. I'm so proud of you. You're becoming better and better!
Sorry For the late comment aki. Poem is simply fantabulous. But it seems there is some implied meaning in it. :) :)
Sehr gut aki. Du hast schön geschreibt.
unakku german thaan theriyumnu nenachen. Spanish kooda theriuma? Apo spanishla oru poem eluthu please!!!
hmmm..aki dawg....ramba feelins a irku.....thani adhichitu ezhudhiniya ena andha master pieceee aa??!!
Lovely write...
but dont use the same metaphor again in the same poem!
like here..
Now that I leave for the sea
and here..
Thoughts! Deep as in the sea
Hey.. The starting stanza was too good.. And the third one too.. But i felt like there is no link to each para.. And you could hav made it a little more rhyming.. I hav a tune fer this.. :) And one more thing i noticed, Deep as in the sea! Hope you know what i'm refering to... :)
I wonder why I should comment on this so long after this's penned down. But easily, this is one the best I ever read!
Words are so beautifully used to get this lovely feel. Great job!
There might be better ways & words to make this poem more stylish, but I believe adding more style to this might take off the feel a little.
Again - wonderful job! This made me ur fan! :-)
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